Final pages!
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This time I did like the glitch effect. It’s done with a liquify brush in ClipStudio, very fun to use.
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Speaking of glitches, I removed a piece of dialogue where Xeni asks “is it a glitch”? and Fran replies “I’m not sure. Does it matter?” I’m still not sure about keeping or leaving it. It might be a good reminder that this is all a digital environment, after all. But in the sketch version, it sounded reiterative.
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On the other hand, I’ll add a dialogue in the first panels, where the mom talks about Xeni using a weird big head avatar. I get the impression that, without any mention of it, the moment where she drops the head, seems off, and the reader could be expecting something else. There’s no reveal, other than she’s a regular girl. The big head is only a choice that comes from her sadness; it’s not the central point of the story, though. (I’d say the point is rather the difficulty of healing and moving on, and tangentially, the risks of artificial measures of relief from grief)
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My overall feeling is that I’ve been looking at this story from too close lately to be really content with it. I need to “zoom out” a little in order to know how it works, if it works. I’m afraid it’s more “enigmatic” than I wanted it to be, but I’ll settle for it to have a sense of completion, and communicate a transformation. I’ll try that the final assembling and bits of tuning improve the comic a little.
I hope you liked seeing the construction of this comic bit by bit! I’ll put the pieces together next, to share the whole story, and make a post with it. I appreciate the input and comments on the process. To be honest, now I really want to start drawing something new. (Also, the next post is about custom drawings!)
Thanks!
